2011-2012 Student Writing

1/19/2012

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Alyssa

1/19/2012 03:25:57 am

Im writing a story and I need a name for the main character! Its a girl. THANK YOU! :D

Austin Bowers

1/19/2012 03:27:21 am

Erica!

Mrs. Beard

1/19/2012 04:38:46 am

Think of the type of character that you want to develop. The name should fit the personality. If it is a mysterious person, maybe a plain name would not be so fitting--etc.

Emily

1/23/2012 03:46:30 am

Candice
Mariah
Lily
Jennifer

Slade

2/3/2012 03:16:56 am

Myka
Marah
Danna
Penelope

Austin Bowers

1/19/2012 03:26:40 am

hey guys. this is my book that i'm working on.

The Death Lord
PROLOGUE

When Raleigh entered the cold, wet cave, all he could see was a dimly lit torch mounted upon the wall. His only intention was to find his missing brother. Raleigh was young, fifteen to be exact. He had long black hair and light blue eyes. He was scrawny and did not look like the average warrior, but, what he lacked in strength, he made up for in intellect. He had trained himself in the art of ancient magic.

“Orin!” yelled Raleigh. “Keep on your guard! These caves hold many secrets, and I do not want to fall prey to them!”
“As you wish. What do you wish to find in this cave?” Asked Orin.
“Answers. I wish to find answers.” Raleigh replied.

When the boys walked through a narrow tunnel, they began into a big room with brick walls. The room was cold and uninviting. An old, broken staircase was positioned at the other side of the room. Raleigh quickly knew something was wrong. The air became still and everything became quiet. Orin stared long into the staircase, then, something startling happened. An arrow pierced his shoulder. Raleigh shot a bolt of fire towards the other end of the room and hit the staircase. Then, a wave of skeletons, at least six, appeared. Two were ancient mages; they cast spells and they are trained in ancient magic. The rest were warriors with battle-hardened armor.

“tilth-flasi!” Yelled Raleigh.
Another bolt of fire launched from Raleigh’s hand and hit the first mage hard, knocking it on its back. Its arm fell off in the process. Orin had already lunged himself into battle, slicing and stabbing at the skeletons. Orin was strong. He wore bright silver armor. He had short brown hair, and dark red eyes. He was a warrior and had been trained in the arts of battle. Ignoring the arrow in his shoulder, he fought hard and killed 3 of the skeletons. The mages kept themselves alive by healing and reviving the dead.

“Kill the mages, Orin!” yelled Raleigh franticly. “They are reviving the dead!”
“I know this! I’m not entirely stupid!” Orin yelled back.
Raleigh and Orin had known each other for a long time. They had grown up together in the same village before it was ransacked by Thelos. Thelos are creatures that take the figure of a wolf by day, but, at night they grow in size and become a cross between a werewolf and a human. The Thelos are creatures that don’t like to be messed with. The village hunter was hunting and killed what he thought was a wolf. It was, in fact, an omega Thelos. That night they killed most of the villagers. Raleigh and Orin survived the attack and walked to the nearest village. The only memories he could remember from that day, were the ones that mentioned The Death Lord.

CHAPTER 1
The THIEF
It was a nice day in the kingdom of Arathor. The wind was peaceful and you could hear birds singing their songs in the distance. Arathor always seemed to be the most peaceful kingdom in the land of Lorant, but, everything has its secrets.
“Oi! Mate!” yelled the merchant. “Stop stealin’ frum me shop!”
“I’m not stealing! I’m only borrowing!” said Alvar snickering.
“Ye ye. But borrowing mens’ you bring et’ back!”
By then, Alvar had already gone. Alvar couldn’t afford a home nor could he afford anything else. He had to steal his whole life. It was the only way for him to survive. Alvar was skinny. He had long red hair and his eyes were a bloody red color. He carried a sword with him. This sword was special. His father had enchanted the sword. This made the sword powerful against other swords and made it quite valuable. He knew this. Although he wanted a home, and he had a sword that could buy him possibly three homes, he did not sell it. This sword had been passed down through his family. Alvar knew what it had been used for before him. The sword was owned by the High lord of Zarr, Alvar’s Great grandfather. The High lord was an evil man. He hated everyone. Even himself. His life ended brutally when the dragon attacked his kingdom. The dragon killed almost everyone. The ones who survived crawled to the nearest villages. Some survived and lived to tell the tale, others died due to fatal wounds. Alvar was only an infant at the time. He can’t remember his grandfather’s name. He can’t recall anybody using his name. Everybody called him the High lord. Nobody knew his real name. After the death of the High lord, he was honored at a funeral. Although his body was never found after the dragon attack, everyone presumed him dead. Now it’s fifteen years later. There have been two new High lords since the attack. Now Alvar’s father is the High lord of Zarr. Alvar did not enjoy the kingdom life, so

Alyssa

1/19/2012 03:31:19 am

This is so good! You need to keep on writing this! :)

Baylie

1/19/2012 04:05:17 am

This is AWESOME!!!

Austin

1/19/2012 11:06:30 pm

there was alot more but it only posted this much....

Alexys Crawford

1/20/2012 02:07:11 am

Wow your AMAZING!!!!! You should post the rest

Emily

1/23/2012 03:45:32 am

This is like really good. I like the way you worded it.

hector

2/7/2012 10:53:40 pm

awsome

Mrs. Beard

2/3/2012 12:47:09 am

You know I always tell you that you are an awesome writer! Keep working on your stories!!

Austin

2/7/2012 03:57:08 am

You know me Mrs. Beard! You know how skitz i get on this stuff and how i always think i'm the worst writers in the world.

Slade

2/3/2012 03:17:55 am

I love it!!

Kevin

3/24/2013 11:58:45 pm

Pickles dude.

Laramie

2/15/2012 01:05:18 am

That's totally AWESOME!!!!!

madison

2/24/2012 12:27:19 am

it was so good you are a amazing writer i loved it :)

Alyssa

1/19/2012 03:51:37 am

Here is a poem I might work on later. Im going to be posting more!!!
Forget me not,
forget me now,
the show is over,
take a bow,
scream your pain,
into the dark,
the night is silent,
the feeding starts.

The feeding stops,
feet flat on the ground,
hold on tight,
it spins me around,
you try to run,
the feeling will find you,
up in the sky,
the darkness will bind you.

Should I use this for the poem contest???

Hannah

1/19/2012 04:05:37 am

Very Good!!!

Alexys

1/20/2012 02:08:28 am

totally your amazing as well

Emily

1/23/2012 03:47:28 am

Very Nice Alyssa!!!

Mrs. Beard

2/3/2012 12:48:33 am

I like this one. As far as the contest goes...I think they look for poems that will appeal to a wide range of people. I like it, but not sure how the judges would feel--you just never know!

Hector

2/7/2012 11:01:25 pm

Yes i love that poem

Jaden

2/13/2012 10:43:10 pm

not bad

Baylie

1/19/2012 04:02:56 am

hhhmmmm

Sydney

1/19/2012 04:07:10 am

Silence seeps in,
there's a knocking on the door,
my mind creeps in,
blood red puddles on the floor,
"Murder!" she screams,
the knife is in the den,
run away love,
before the monster feeds again.

Is this any good?

Alyssa

1/19/2012 04:10:10 am

Yes. Yes it is. :D

Sydney

1/24/2012 03:41:46 am

Thank you! (:

Emily

1/24/2012 03:15:27 am

This is good! It is so murder-ish. Ha-ha

Sydney

1/24/2012 03:40:54 am

Thank you, but at first you thought it was about love. Ha-ha

Emily

1/27/2012 02:15:44 am

Ha Yes I did.

Sydney

1/27/2012 03:02:34 am

It was pretty Hi-Larious, te opposite if Low-Larious. Ha! Should I use it for the Poem contest?

Emily

2/1/2012 02:05:59 am

@Sydney- You should use it for the poem contest if Mrs.Beard Says it is appropriate

Mrs. Beard

2/3/2012 12:56:58 am

Very nice!

Sydney

2/3/2012 03:12:56 am

Thank you! (:

Baylie M.

2/15/2012 03:56:41 am

This is one of the best poems I have ever heard squidley :)

Alyssa

1/19/2012 04:09:15 am

End Of Time:
I see him running towards me,
as Im laying in the grass,
tears trickle down my face,
and I begin to laugh.
He tells me he loves me,
presses his lips into mine,
but in my heart I know,
it is the end of time.

Emily

1/26/2012 03:27:33 am

Aww that's so sad

Alyssa

1/31/2012 11:16:38 pm

Thats what I was going for ;)

Mrs. Beard

2/3/2012 01:06:45 am

I like this one--you might want to look at submitting this one for the contest

Alexys Crawford

1/20/2012 02:10:57 am

This story is really crazy I made it and I thought it was pretty good so.....tell me what you think!!!!!
Once upon a time a little kernel was sitting in his room watching the cotton candy (clouds) flow above his. He was thinking of how he’ll never become an popcorn./ everyone in his class were already popcorn expect him. He felt lonely. Everyone beats him up and taught him. His mother, beauty said that one day he will grow but his father, raunchy said that a man who cant cut wood well never be a man. The little kernel won’t get a name until he becomes popcorn. Soon the chocolate bed started to get uncomfortable so he went outdoors to the soft icing on the ground (grass) and then he heard a scream coming from the clef. He ran over to where it was the was Mr. Gingerbread man hanging over the edge “help my boy” Kernel reached over and grab Mr. Gingerbread man. As soon as Mr. Gingerbread man and then he spouted he got turned into popcorn!!!!!!!! His mother ran to him “your name is salty I love you” “I love you too!

Alexys

1/20/2012 02:13:21 am

As I said its really crazy!!!!

Alexys Crawford

1/20/2012 02:44:21 am

I made this story myself tell me what you think
Ring Ring the bell for Emma to go home was really short today for some odd reason. Emma hurries to her locker but as soon as she got there and opened her locker door there was blood all over her school books. For about a minute she stood there and looked very closely at the bloody books maybe it was a prank maybe it was someone trying to scare her. She grabbed her bag and left for the bus. As soon as Emma got home she went to her room to do her homework but as soon as she got there all she saw was her mirror. On her mirror had blood marks to make the word pig want did it mean. Emma went into the bathroom nothing was on the mirror but the bathroom shower was on. So Emma asked if it was her mom. No answer. So she opened the shower door there was her mom in her Sunday best. Laying there no pulse no heart beat. She turned around to face the mirror there was the word pig in blood. She called 911 right away. 2 months later she lives with her grandma and her little brother, Austin had friends over and finally got the nerve to ask to go to the park of course she said yes. Later on that day grandma went to the store as soon as she was gone Emma went to her room in the hallway her brothers car was going back and forth but no one was even in it she took the key out of the car and set on her grandmothers dresser when she turned around she saw a shadow and a girly high pitched sound coming from her bedroom. In her bedroom pig was written in blood on her mirror she grabbed a washcloth and started to stub the bloody words off her mirror but as the blood came off a picture showed up it was a picture of her and her father. Her father died because of murdering a little girl. The little girl was only 3 and died in 1978. The law planed to kill her father for murdering the little girl and breaking out of jail 4 times to see Emma. It hurt Emma to even think about her father. Soon Emma realized that she was going to have to find who this little girl is and if she’s the haunting her. So she grabbed her phone and jacket and ran to the bookstore. She was out of breathe by the time she got there she sat down for about 10 minutes than got up and searched for a book. Finally she found a book called Deaths of 1970-2000 she checked it out and ran back home. As she searched threw it she felt breathing on her back. Soon she came up t a page she’d never seen before
Precious Idaho Garden
Died of being stabbed 19 times in her back and 4 shots in her head.
Her killer was: Jason Humphrey He had a daughter named Emma Humphrey
Emma soon found out this is the girl. She heard laughter coming from the kitchen she walked slowly to the noise. Her eyes were shut tightly
“Pig pig pig pig pig”
Is all she heard she opened her eyes a little girl was looking at her saying die die die die die die over and over again finally the little girl grabbed a knife and knocked her down to the ground and stabbed her multiple times. Soon the police found her dead. On her bed with no blood at all but with 19 stabs in the back and 4 shots in the head

megan adamson

1/23/2012 05:11:43 am

try to make a story about a haunted middle school bathroom. I bet it would be really intresting. Espessioly with you writing it.

Alexys Crawford

1/24/2012 02:13:24 am

Hmmmmm Ok for you but give me two weeks or so ill soon get it done (maybe)

megan adamson

1/24/2012 05:34:35 am

thanks a lot your the2nd besty

Emily

1/23/2012 04:00:44 am

I am working on a story. This is just like a little part. I'm not too sure about it yet. I do not have a title yet.

I don’t know why I was left alone. I just was. My guardian Julie always told me it was because my mother died and father just wasn’t in the position to take care of me. But I honestly don’t think that’s an excuse. I’m not mad. Just lonely. My father is still alive. And she knows that. But I can’t see him. Can't talk to him. It doesn’t make much sense to me. I want to see him more and more every day. But she just tells me to forget. I would do anything just to see a picture.
These thoughts happened to me every day. And every day they got stronger. I was growing tired of waiting on Julie to answer them. If she didn’t answer them soon, I was going to find out on my own.

Mrs. Beard

2/3/2012 12:46:22 am

Looks good...I can't wait to read the rest!

Kayla Neal

1/24/2012 02:22:40 am

I’m an old miner my name is Kayla listen here sonny im 11 years old and im already a miner just like you days are good in this is home sweet home dust every were I don’t sneeze any more I guess I have gotten used to this thing its very dusty. I live in this thing I find gold all the time I don’t buy fancy mansions or stuff like that I wouldn’t change thing for a new hat. I love my mine its home sweet home I give all my gold to charity use they need it more then I do me and my family live in this thing sister Kari, brother josh, and pa pa and ma. I love my mine and family and all the other miners just like me. By Kayla neal

Kayla Neal

1/24/2012 02:25:00 am

So what do you think???????????

Kayla Neal

1/24/2012 02:27:56 am

Once upon a time there was three was three corns on the cobs one was named jerry the others were called Steve and bob they set in the second row. The movie begins its called Corn Killer. It starts off with a person eating popcorn they scream ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh! Then all of them say oh my god its……… there making…….. Carmel corn ahhhhh! Then it gets really hot! Then they start spitting out popcorn. They here chewing they look up its somebody chewing it’s a person then they scream they get eaten its really scary the end!

kayla neal

1/24/2012 02:30:51 am

awsome right tell me what you think if i was popcorn i would be scared!!!

Sydney

1/24/2012 03:50:13 am

You don't come home,
you never call,
as the rain begins to fall,
I become more scared,
and filled with hatred,
as my emotions become more sacred.

~Sydney Donham

So what do you think?

Emily

1/27/2012 02:17:22 am

Pretty Nice Syd. It was worded Pretty Well.

Sydney

1/27/2012 03:03:20 am

Thank you. Thank you very much! (:

Hector

2/7/2012 10:58:40 pm

I think it is awesome syd

Sydney

2/9/2012 02:57:40 am

Thanks!(:

Alexys

3/27/2012 02:42:14 am

I like it Sydney

Austin

1/30/2012 03:46:04 am

Fun is fiction,
just another fantasy,
when you looked for love, why'd you look for me?
i told you no,
i let you go,
and now i'm free

so what do you think?
i just thought it up lol

Alexys C

1/31/2012 02:37:16 am

This is just a little part of the story. I still dont know the main character! If you think of a name please let me know.

I hope he'll come by way but all he does is stare at me like my dog after a treat wanting more i mean he wont even talk to me anymore. I hate they way something simple like falling in all can break our bond! Brothers! They better off turning into cats!!! And yes I know mom and dad ALWAYS says "Hes your brother, dear" grrrr!!!!

PLEASE REPLY

Alexys Crawford

2/2/2012 04:12:53 am

Yes this is true but I was eight I was scared of EVERYTHING!!!!!One Afternoon I stood the night at my cousins not knowing what was going to happen the next day. As soon as I woke up from my aunt’s couch I got up and ran to see if my cousin, Chelsea was awake. She was of course laying on her beanbag watching cartoons. When I opened the door she came flying after me. When she finished hugging me we ran downstairs to a breakfast of coco puffs cereal. Soon Dustin, Dakota, and Taylor (my other cousins) had a bowl too. My Aunt Elizabeth who was 14 at the time was awake watching Scooby-doo with us while my aunt Jamie was sleeping. When my aunt woke up we all got changed into bathing suits to get ready to swim! We grabbed our towels and left to the Neosho pool. We had fun for an hour or two and finally my cousin Chelsea made a trouble mistake that she herself still won’t forget. She dared me to jump off the high dive, and of course I didn’t take no for an answer. I climbed the crazy high dive. My heart beating harder than it’s ever has beat before I felt like I was going to die. I felt a puddle touch my feet and I fell off the dive!! I was so scared I started crying and crying. I couldn’t breathe. I knew I was dead and gone I prayed to live. I hit the ground and I started crying harder. The ambulance put me onto a bed and rolled me in. My aunt Elizabeth stayed with me in the trunk. I got to the hospital and after they checked me and everything while the lady at the front desk called my family. My parents were at work and couldn’t pick me up and then my grandma came and stood by me the whole time. Soon my Aunt Jackie came and bought me a bear and an ice crème bar. I got in the car and went home. I told myself that id NEVER go to the pool again!!!!!!!
tell me what you think

Alyssa

2/2/2012 10:49:37 pm

Fall
Crimson leaves,
Fall to the ground,
The apple scented wind,
Spins me around,
A whirl of color,
A frenzy of fire,
Seeing it all,
Is my only desire.

I'm thinking about making another seasons poem :) But IDK yet.

Emily

2/3/2012 03:15:44 am

Okay I am Thinking about using this for the poetry contest.
Tell me your thoughts.

Mittens
My Mittens are red
My Mittens are leopard
My Mittens are mine
Not anyone else’s
So Don’t drive your big truck
Into my house
Don’t steal my mittens
Or my pet squirrel will knock you out.

HaHa

Austin

2/7/2012 04:00:53 am

This is the most hilarious thing i've ever heard of since i heard of Hoot dancing! XD

Emily

2/9/2012 02:36:46 am

TeeHee thanks

Slade

2/7/2012 11:33:14 pm

That was awesome!! I love it. What's the squirrel's name?

Emily

2/9/2012 02:38:25 am

I am thinking Roberto

Sydney

2/9/2012 03:03:43 am

Is this the dream you had about Dallas driving into your driveway with a big truck and trying to steal your mittens? (: Bahaha! This is the best poem ever!

Emily

2/9/2012 03:07:28 am

Yes it is!

coder

2/3/2012 03:19:03 am

YEAH BUDDY!!! i think thats amazing! That is a beautiful peice of art!

Emily

2/3/2012 03:22:53 am

lol yaaaaa!

Slade

2/3/2012 03:28:41 am

How is this poem

So here I am,
Here I stand,
The end is near,
And we fear,
I feel a tear,
The end is here,
Watch the flame,
Feel my shame,
Burning badly,
dying sadly.

Emily

2/6/2012 03:33:42 am

That's so sad Slade!! So much Emotion!!

Dak

2/9/2012 02:40:43 am

i find it every good sad just like everyone else.

cody

2/9/2012 03:08:21 am

beautiful poem!

Sydney

2/9/2012 02:55:32 am

Hey, this is the story I am working on, I hope you like it(:

“Hey!” yelled Jessica. The stranger just kept on walking.
“Hello?!” she yelled frantically. “I need help!” she cried.
The stranger stopped and stared. At this time Jessica didn’t know whether she should have asked him to stop or not. The stranger turned around and headed for a dark alley. The stranger was dressed in a long black rain coat with a top hat on. Jessica thought that it looked kind of creepy. She has seen movies about murders dressed like that. At this point she turned around and started running. She ran as fast as she could. She began to look back and saw that no one was behind her so she slowed down. She had walked three blocks by now. She kept on walking, but when she got to the corner she saw the stranger walking towards her again. She knew it was him from the way his body was all hunched over. She began to run again. She was so scared. Her heart was racing. She ran to the nearest door and banged on it, but no one answered. She began to cry out for help, but no one could hear her pleas. Unknowingly she didn’t see that the stranger was right behind her. She tried to scream, but he put his hand over her mouth and dragged her into an alley.
“Don’t scream or I will kill you.” he said. Jessica nodded her head. As soon as he let go of her mouth Jessica kicked him and started to make a run for it. The stranger just laughed and took off after her. She was running and screaming at the same time. She knew she shouldn’t have walked home by herself. She knew she would get lost in a new town. All while she was thinking about this the stranger had already gotten her. He threw her in the back of his van and locked the doors. He took off down the road into the night.

To be continued. . . . . . . .
Jessica passed out while she was in the back of the van. When she woke up she was inside a basement strapped to a pole. Her legs and hands were tied up and her mouth was covered with duck-tape. She tried to scream, but she was too weak. She broke out in tears begging and pleading although no one was there to help her. She heard someone coming down the stairs so she acted like she was still passed out. It was the stranger. He had a glass of water and a belt in his hand. He threw the water on Jessica. She didn’t move. She thought that if that didn’t work he would leave her alone. But she was wrong. He whipped her with the belt across the face. Only then did she respond. She cried even harder before he took the duck-tape off of her mouth.
“You know I don’t take it kindly to people who kick me!” said the stranger. He whipped her across the stomach.
She screamed. “Please”, she cried, “Don’t kill me; I have people who will be looking for me. Please just let me go.” She pleaded. “Remember you stopped me little girl, you brought this on yourself!” he yelled. “Don’t you understand? You will be caught and tortured for what you’re doing!” she cried. Smack! He whipped her again on the face. “Don’t ever say that to me! Don’t ever threaten me! Ever!” he yelled. “I own you now, your mine until I’m finished with you.” He snickered.

Whachya think?

Alexys

2/14/2012 02:53:34 am

I REALLY LIKE!

Alyssa

2/15/2012 04:03:41 am

THIS IS SO FREAKING AMAZING!!!!

Alyssa

2/20/2012 02:19:00 am

“Erica!” I heard my sister scream as she was dragged away. That was the last thing I saw before the thing came for me. Silence. Visions passed through my head. Memories I didn’t even remember having. But only one word rang through my mind. Samantha. I needed to find her.
I felt a cold splash of water on my face. Spluttering, I sat up and rubbed the sleep out of my eyes and saw I was sitting in the middle of a cell. A boy, about my age was sitting in a corner and staring at me. “Where am I?” I yelled at him. He smiled at me and said, “This is where it takes its victims.” “I need to get out of here and find my sister!” My voice had taken a hysterical edge. “Please help me!” I began walking around the cell inspecting the iron barred door. “There is no escape.” He said quietly. “It will come for us next.”
After looking around, I found a lock on the outside of the door. I took a bobby pin out of my hair and tried to open it. Surprisingly, it opened with ease. “That is what it wants,” he said. “It wants you to suffer.” I opened the door. “You can come with me if you want. I just need to find my sister.” Slowly he got up and edged towards the door. “Fine,” he said “I’m going to be killed either way.”
The passageway was lined with more cells. There were at least two people in each cell. Most were huddled in corners like the boy was. I realized I didn’t know his name. He was walking next to me, staring at the ground. “What is your name?” I asked. “Zane.” he said, walking faster. As we walked on I noticed that if we weren’t in this situation, I would probably think he was really cute. He had dark shaggy hair and grey eyes. “Look ahead.” He said. “I see a light.”
The passage opened up to a circular room with torches lining it. “Where do you think my sister is?” I asked, looking up at Zane. “Well,” he said. “She is probably with the— whatever that thing is.” We walked through the circular room until we got to a giant staircase leading down stairs. “Wish us luck.” I said quietly as we started walking downstairs.
“It smells like death down here.” Said Zane. I shuddered as we continued to walk down the stairs. When we reached the bottom I hear muffled shrieks coming from one of the rooms. I ran around the halls trying to find my sister. “God, it’s like a labyrinth down here!” I yelled. Zane was pressed up against the wall listening. I stopped and stared at him. Slowly he looked up at me and said, “Follow me.”
We winded through the dark and twisted hallways-- Which actually looked more like caves-- until we came to a stop at a large boulder. It was wedged inside what looked to be an even bigger circular room. Suddenly it started moving to the side. Zane grabbed me around the waist and pulled me into a crevice in the wall. A huge, almost human like creature lumbered out of the hole. It had a sack covering its head and a bloody trail behind it. It was heading back the way we came. Probably to get another one of those people in the cells. Without waiting for Zane, I ran into the hole calling my sister’s name. “Samantha!” No answer. I grabbed a torch from the walls outside and ran back in. When I saw the room I was in I choked back a scream. There were body parts strewn everywhere. Some were hanging from the ceiling by ropes and chains. That’s when I saw my sister. She was huddled in a corner. I could have mistaken her for a pile of rocks if I hadn’t have noticed her hair. Long black waist length hair. This was what she was famous for back home. I grabbed her and tried to make her sit up. There was a gash across her forehead and she was passed out. I thought she was dead until I saw some shallow breaths escape her mouth. I slapped her face and yelled in her ear but she wouldn’t wake up. That’s when Zane finally ran in. He grabbed her and slung her over his shoulder. “Let’s go hide before it comes back.” He said. We ran back to the hole in the wall we hid in before and we all tried to wedge ourselves in it. Samantha woke up and started screaming.

Emilaaay

2/21/2012 03:40:40 am

THIS IS GOOOOOOD!

Alyssa

2/24/2012 02:00:21 am

Thanx!!! Im still working on it though.

Laramie

2/24/2012 12:27:25 am

IDK if this is good or not, but please respond!
This is the final stand,
the day it all ends.
I cannot deny
that I have been in so much pain
watching so many men, women, and children die,
for saying what others feel inside.
Today thy king comes to save thee from
suffering anymore
let the whole world sing,
‘Thy king is coming today!’
Rose, my little one, today
I, your mom, will be free.
We shall be free!

Laramie

2/24/2012 12:28:57 am

Like I said IDK about it!!!

Austin

2/27/2012 02:17:16 am

Yeah. it's good. is it a religious poem?

Laramie Wilson

2/28/2012 12:38:57 am

No, it's the one that's going to the poem contest. You liked it?

Laramie

2/28/2012 12:42:00 am

Hey I need help! I'm typing a story and I need Indian names!! Please help me!!

Laramie Wilson

2/28/2012 12:57:58 am

I'm sorry, but I also need some out-of-the-ordinary Tribe names too!

Laramie Wilson

3/1/2012 12:23:54 am

Heller, what do yous think about this?
Rudd was out hunting he heard a baby caribou cry in the distance. “Well, there goes dinner”, he thought to himself as he walked to the red deer that he had just injured and saw that it was walking away! “What in the world? HEY! Come back!” he screamed at the limping deer. Well my father was killed by a mountain lion, my mother is dead, and I don’t have dinner; this has been a perfect day. Then out of the blue he heard a voice yell “Who’s there? Come out or I’ll shoot your little cub here!” Tigress, oh crap! I left her at the camp.

laramie

3/1/2012 02:04:34 am

you hold my hand
you are my scare
you kill my love
now my hand is bare
here me now
i kill the sow
and you wonder
why you're dying
now i feel like flying

Laramie

4/9/2012 12:31:53 am

so far?
How's this Ruby, who was always picked on, was dared to camp out in the 4th floor boy’s bathroom. She didn’t want to be picked on anymore and if she did this she would be popular and respected.
“Okay let’s get this thing over with. Where’s my tent?”
“Right here,” said an unidentified voice. Then Mia (the skateboarding queen) came forward holding Ruby’s tent.
“Looking for this?” said Mia, “I’ll help you put this up.”
“Yeah, that’s exactly what I was looking for,” Ruby replied with hidden annoyance. The next couple hours were a blur with Mia talking, setting up the tent, and feeling chilled all at the same time.
“Is there a window open?” Ruby thought out loud.
“No, but it does feel breezy in here doesn’t it?” said Mia. Then Ruby heard a high-heeled shoe sound right behind her. But Mia is in front of me is this bathroom haunted? she thought to herself.
“Hey, Mia are you cold?” said Ruby.
“Yeah, are you?” said Mia.
Mia thought Ruby was playing a little prank on her. I wonder if this bathroom really is haunted by the ghost of Sapphire Anubis she thought to herself. Then from nowhere she heard,
“Is anybody there?” said a voice.
“Randy! Don’t scare me like that again,” she screamed at Randy, her new boyfriend.
“Sorry babe I couldn’t find you anywhere,” said a very cold to the touch Randy. I wonder if Randy has been in the school freezer again, Mia thought to herself. Randy gave a shiver and Mia knew something was wrong.
“Randy are you okay?” asked a frightened and cold Ruby. Randy is acting, but she didn’t get a chance to finish her thought.
“Yeah, I’m fine. Why?” said an agitated Randy.
Sapphire thought that Randy could help her return from the dead.
“Get away from him!” she roared at Ruby and the so-called Mia. Alyssa, she scorned Mia, you could do so much more to kill Ruby, if you tried. She gave a chuckle that made Mia remember her job.
Mia finally told Ruby the truth.
“My name isn’t Mia its Alyssa and I have a mission to kill you and revive Sapphire Anubis!”
What am I doing, is Sapphire willing to kill me to live, Alyssa thought to herself. What I’m Sapphire Anubis, Alyssa died.
“Alyssa, I know that you think you’re Sapphire Anubis but the truth is I’m Sapphire Anubis.”
Ruby thought that Mia, Alyssa, Sapphire whoever that girl is, is off her rocker.

Dak

5/3/2012 04:14:16 am

here is a story i have been working on.
Move it! Go put the base in full lockdown! Not thing gets in or out of here. Got it!
“YES SIR!” As the men move out something happened.
Something that can’t be stop, this is how the lockdown began and ended.
Shh! “You here that.” “It coming from the vent shoot it!” As they open fire a mind blowing thing came out. “Behind you turn your fire!”
“Aim for the face” it’s coming back move now!” “Go! Go! Go! don’t stop!” “Where is alpha!”
“Try making a link with them.” We have a better chance if we were in weapons room.” “ Well make a regroup spot at the weapons room and get all the men we can on the way.” “I agree with Trey.” Trey was a person was someone who will shoot a tango on sight unless told. “We a captain” said Trey “I say Tony is the best one here, do you want to Tony.” Yes, I will lead us to the biggest win we will ever have.” Agreed Tony. “Let’s move out!” “Alpha we are getting a call this is delta we are going to the weapons room to take over the base delta out.” “That’s it well we have to be there in ten make it five.” “Ok move it.” Big bro this is little bro meet us in the weapons room little bro out.” five minutes later……
“We are almost there.” “Tangos five o’clock.” Guns open fire but one of the things got the captain but they know what they’re going to do. “Everyone ok Smith is down.” “Keep moving.” ”We can’t stop.”
“We need a new captain, Trey you up.” “Yes I am.” “Everyone get fit to fight we have no clue on how many there are!” Yelled Trey. “We need the doc.” Said one of the troops. “She is most likely to be in the lab.” Said Tony. “Well we need to get there before the flood do.” Said Trey. “The flood?” “Hell we need to call it something.” Answered Trey. “We’ll go with you.” No! “We will need a fall back spot and this is it ok.” “Got it.” “Yes sir.” “Move out.” As they move down the hall it seemed like it will never end.
In the lab there is a way to kill the flood. Bravo is making sure she has her alone time in her lab. Noting gets in the lab. As alpha move down the hall 30 creatures killed by bravo in trey’s mind they might be ODST. ODST are super solders they will great people to have with you they have doctors that have their med to heal anything sometime bring people back that are the best doctors in here. I wish we had better people in here. Maybe the doctor can make some armor for the troops. Delta is still holding their spot in the weapons room and they got a lot of ammo to kill a small army. What’s outside I have no clue on what is outside if there is nothing that will get in in till we get out well there no time to think about this. As soon as they make it they almost came holey as they came under fire from friendly’s fire. Hold your fire! As soon as they head that. The room when cold and they were alive. “Just kill us now if you want” said Jason. “Hey this hall is a war zone.” ODST yelled back “That means kill… ” “shut up Jason you might live longer.” Cut off by Trey “I’ll try to remember that next time.” Jason said to himself a little loud. “What did I say?!” Yelled Trey “Shut up.” Answered Jason “Then do it.” Remarked Trey “Do you know what she is doing?” “Asked Trey She is making weapons that will kill them in one shot.” Replied the ODST “Well we need to get outside to make this work, this lab doesn’t have the resource we need.” She busted out of the lab and kept moving. “Let’s move back to the weapons room.” “Told the doctor Ok but make it quick.” Replied the doctor as soon as they reach the weapons room the flood’s blood coved the walls. “We have everyone that is in the base.” said Tony “That helps.” “Move out!” Yelled the captains as they move out of the base they had where they can train back up and have tanks and air attacks. “Make as many helicopters as possible.” Grey wolf told them over the coms and get your troops over here over and out. “You heard the man!” Yelled the ODSTs “I Thought it was wolf.” Hoot AKA Jason Trey shot him a look that said shut up or I will kick your butt so hard you sit on your face. But Hoot did not lesson like always. The whole earth was a wasteland law was noting to people now. “We have to make the best solders here d

Dak

5/7/2012 02:08:34 am

Here is the look over and added somethings.
Move it! Go put the base in full lockdown! Not thing gets in or out of here. Got it!
“YES SIR!” As the men move out something happened.
Something that can’t be stop, this is how the lockdown began and ended.
Shh! “You here that.” “It coming from the vent shoot it!” As they open fire a mind blowing thing came out. “Behind you turn your fire!”
“Aim for the face” it’s coming back move now!” “Go! Go! Go! don’t stop!” “Where is alpha!”
“Try making a link with them.” We have a better chance if we were in weapons room.” “ Well make a regroup spot at the weapons room and get all the men we can on the way.” “I agree with Trey.” Trey was a person was someone who will shoot a tango on sight unless told. “We need a captain” said Trey “I say Tony is the best one here, do you want to Tony.” Yes, I will lead us to the biggest win we will ever have.” Agreed Tony. “Let’s move out!” “Alpha we are getting a call this is delta we are going to the weapons room to take over the base delta out.” “That’s it well we have to be there in ten make it five.” “Ok move it.” Big bro this is little bro meet us in the weapons room little bro out.” five minutes later……
“We are almost there.” “Tangos five o’clock.” Guns open fire but one of the things got the captain but they know what they’re going to do. “Everyone ok Smith is down.” “Keep moving.” ”We can’t stop.”
“We need a new captain, Trey you up.” “Yes I am.” “Everyone get fit to fight we have no clue on how many there are!” Yelled Trey. “We need the doc.” Said one of the troops. “She is most likely to be in the lab.” Said Tony. “Well we need to get there before the flood do.” Said Trey. “The flood?” “Hell we need to call it something.” Answered Trey. “We’ll go with you.” No! “We will need a fall back spot and this is it ok.” “Got it.” “Yes sir.” “Move out.” As they move down the hall it seemed like it will never end.
In the lab there is a way to kill the flood. Bravo is making sure she has her alone time in her lab. Noting gets in the lab. As alpha move down the hall 30 creatures killed by bravo in trey’s mind they might be ODST. ODST are super solders they will great people to have with you they have doctors that have their med to heal anything sometime bring people back that are the best doctors in here. I wish we had better people in here. Maybe the doctor can make some armor for the troops. Delta is still holding their spot in the weapons room and they got a lot of ammo to kill a small army. What’s outside I have no clue on what is outside if there is nothing that will get in in till we get out well there no time to think about this. As soon as they make it they almost came holey as they came under fire from friendly’s fire. Hold your fire! As soon as they head that. The room when cold and they were alive. “Just kill us now if you want” said Jason. “Hey this hall is a war zone.” ODST yelled back “That means kill… ” “shut up Jason you might live longer.” Cut off by Trey “I’ll try to remember that next time.” Jason said to himself a little loud. “What did I say?!” Yelled Trey “Shut up.” Answered Jason “Then do it.” Remarked Trey “Do you know what she is doing?” “Asked Trey She is making weapons that will kill them in one shot.” Replied the ODST “Well we need to get outside to make this work, this lab doesn’t have the resource we need.” She busted out of the lab and kept moving. “Let’s move back to the weapons room.” “Told the doctor Ok but make it quick.” Replied the doctor as soon as they reach the weapons room the flood’s blood coved the walls. “We have everyone that is in the base.” said Tony “That helps.” “Move out!” Yelled the captains as they move out of the base they had where they can train back up and have tanks and air attacks. “Make as many helicopters as possible.” Grey wolf told them over the coms and get your troops over here over and out. “You heard the man!” Yelled the ODSTs “I Thought it was wolf.” Hoot AKA Jason Trey shot him a look that said shut up or I will kick your butt so hard you sit on your face. But Hoot did not lesson like always. The whole earth was a wasteland law was noting to people now. “We have to make the best solder

2011-2012 Student Writing

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